468

This... should have been two separate pages. I don't know why I thought combining them together would be a good idea.
One thing I do like is the little Rivalry Adult Quat' and Ada are having on the top panels throughout this story.

467

Hate doing newspapers. I fot all the information out on there, but I don't know if the point of it got accross. Luckily the proceeding comic covers for it, but in turn it made the next page very wordy.

466

Conflict between the central characters of a story = Good writing
Lengthy exposition about the history of a made up orginization that no one cares about = bad writing.

465

UGH UGH! This was like 4 pages worth of exposition crammed into that one chalkboard creating one of the stupidest monologues I ever wrote in this story and the background on that first panel makes me want to strangle myself.

Fuck it. Sometime this month, I'm outright scrapping this page and page 464, and I'm rewriting them completely. I don't fucking care if it's been over 2 years, this page is fucking disgraceful. I hate it so god damn much.

464

So the story is that after Quat hear's about how her team functions, she asks why they can't try reforming the heroes instead, and IVan likes the idea, but Shinji does not.
I tried to convey that in this argument between IVan and Shinji after the fact, but it did not pan out right at all.
Really I should have just scrapped this scene and completely rethought it out, but I couldn't afford to redraw it back then.
Also, IVan's Shirtlessness was really hard to draw for me, because I could never make it look like he pants weren't falling down.

463

Now this one, I like. could have used a little something in the background, but the colors are good, the dialogue's playful and the reaction shot at the end is great. Little vectory, though.

462

WHY WHY WHY!? That first panel is painfully unfinished, The sudden revert to black and white doesn't work, the grey tones aren't used well here at all, and it feels like the page is only half written.

This was. I had a lot of enthusiasm for the flashback when I first thought of it. I had some great ideas for what it would lead into, but... I just kept reaching this parts where I couldn't draw it. It's painful reading these.

461

I tried bringing the armless waitress from Marty Mongoose's back into the comic in this flashback. Maybe make a joke foreshadowing her losing her arms. Not the best idea. I should have just focused on the main story of this flashback. Oh well.

460

This scene is supposed to be just after Captain Cue Ball killed Steel Blue Billiards. I should have started with a wideshot that showed the dead body with captain cue ball over it, but instead I made the stupid assumption that I could patch it up with enough dialogue.
Also the name IVan was an interesting joke, but in order for it to work, I would eventually have to change the font for this comic. and reintroduce lowercase lettering again. My reluctance in doing so made the writing all the more tedious

459

This was a bad direction to take the comic. But here it goes...

458

The art really fell apart in this one, didn't it. I don't know. Something just happened at this point.

457

It keeps happening!

456

Hopes original costume was a hammer brother, and I thought it would be clever if he developed his costume into a combination of thor and iron man when he got older. Not sure why I though that was clever.
The knocking Collin unconscious gag is my favorite joke in this part of the story.